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Descend not willingly into madness with me  
The winds blow wildly within my head
Creep back into sanity I quietly plead

There is no joy, nor is there beauty
As my mind twists, turns and spirals down
Descend not willingly into madness with me

Follow me not into my insanity  
Drawn into the murky depths
Creep back into sanity I quietly plead

It is with disdain and veils of sadness I see  
Your attempts to love, and to stay
Descend not willingly into madness with me

Enslaved by my monster, invading my dreams
They all but shatter, like a mirror broken
Creep back into sanity I quietly plead

Walking on the tightrope, trying not to fall
No black and white, all shades of gray
Descend not willingly into madness with me
Creep back into sanity I quietly plead
:iconmeregoddess:
A Vilanelle about madness. I am quite insane and I enjoy it, but I don't recommend it for everyone *wink*
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:iconjosergonzalezf:
Really moving. Poetry has two levels: the meaning (the emotions within the words) and the music (the sound of those words together). Your lines work on both leves beautifully.
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:iconmeregoddess:
Thank you very much. This was one of my first attempts to write a villanelle, and I didn't get it quite right as far as the form goes, but I was still pleased with how the poem turned out.
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:iconseraphanraziel:
I love this one, and I will be more than glad to descend into madness with you. Insanity is always more fun when you have your friends with you. :psychotic:
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:iconmeregoddess:
I do enjoy my insanity lol
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:iconseraphanraziel:
Yes, insanity is a great thing to enjoy, and we insane people come up with the greatest things to occupy ourselves! :giggle:
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=TheSkaBoss Jun 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
The rhyme scheme's not quite right for a villanelle, and you've missed a refrain. :/

It reads well nonetheless, and I very much enjoy the message. :)
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:iconmeregoddess:
crap, I missed a refrain? How could I do that? I'll do better on my next one. At least I tried :)
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=TheSkaBoss Jun 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
*nod* the 5th stanza should have ended with 'Creep back into sanity I quietly plead'. :P

But it was a very good try and an enjoyable read nonetheless. ^^
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